1. Is my storyline enticing?
-Does it capture interest?
-Is the content of mental illness too off-putting because of the personal nature?
2. Do I effectively portray both Wally and Brenda in a credible way?
- Does one get a strong sense of who these people are?
-Do they seem too distant?
-Does Brenda’s voice shine through?
3. Is the whole piece coherent?
-Does it follow a consistent, nice flow of ideas?
4. As it stands, is it compelling enough?
-Does it cover all of the requirements?
-Does the prologue do enough to grab the reader's attention?
-Does the prologue need more background information about Brenda?
-Does the end portion feel forced? Or does it nicely tie up the story?
5. Is there any aspect of the story that leaves you confused or wanting more information?
-Anything in particular I should elaborate on?